俗话说写文章最好就是“凤头猪肚豹尾”，考生们纵然做不到如此高的要求，那么可以学着给自己的雅思作文增加亮点。

　　避免使用语言弱的“be”动词

　　1、在“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语

　　例如：

　　1) Weak：There is no opportunity for promotion.

　　Revision：No opportunity for promotion exists.

　　2) Weak：Here are the books you ordered.

　　Revision：The books you ordered have arrived.

　　2、表语转换为不同的修饰语

　　例如：

　　Weak：The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.

　　Revision：The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)

　　Or：The landscape， bare and brown， begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

　　3、作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词

　　例如：

　　1) Weak：The team members are good players.

　　Revision：The team members play well.

　　2) Weak：One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

　　Revision：One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

　　表语转化为不同的修饰语

　　很多烤鸭不明白什么时候用主动，什么被动!用错了，雅思写作分数自然不高!这样做，也是因为这个原因!

　　例如：

　　1、Weak：The organization has been supported by charity.

　　Better：Charity has supported the organization.

　　2、Weak：The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

　　Better：Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

　　使用具体的动词

　　比较具体的描写会让文章看起来更有说服力，分数当然能提高啦!

　　例如：

　　1、Poor：My supervisor went past my desk.

　　Better：My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

　　2、Poor：She is a careful shopper.

　　Better：She compares prices and quality.

　　不要使用语言过长且累赘的词语

　　写作不是用的词汇越高深就越高分，想提高成绩就要用词简单、生动。

　　例如：

　　1、Wordy：My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

　　Improved：My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

　　2、Wordy：We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

　　Improved：We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

　　3、Redundant：We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　Improved：We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　4、Redundant：My sister and I bought the same， identical dress in different stores.

　　Improved：My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

　　避免陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语

　　雅思是一门语言考试，主要考察烤鸭们的语言运用能力，而写作关键点就在文章的表现力上。

　　例如：

　　1、Weak：They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

　　Improved：They will not agree to any of his proposals.

　　2、Weak：I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

　　Improved：I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.